Friday Fiction: I Love It When You Do That Thing

I almost didn’t make it this week. I wrote a piece about a couple of librarians who start a band, but every time one of them opens their mouth to sing, the other tells them to be quiet. It didn’t work, was way too long, and offended my ex-librarian husband, so I dumped it and did this one instead. Hope you like it :)

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Copyright - Bjorn Brudberg

Copyright – Bjorn Brudberg

 

I Love It When You Do That Thing

Bernie was strumming away on his mandolin-lute thingy.

‘When I play my mandolin-lute thingy,’ he said. ‘It’s like all my troubles just melt away, know what I mean?’

Luke nodded, plucking at the strings of his guitar. ‘Totally. When I play, it’s like I’m transported to foreign lands, with sandy beaches and a warm Mediterranean breeze.’

The barmaid leant over the table. ‘Boys,’ she said, in a sultry voice. ‘When you play, it’s like all my dreams come true.’

‘It is?’

‘Sure, because everyone else leaves double-quick and I get to go home early. Now drink up and bugger off.’

 

(100 words)

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58 thoughts on “Friday Fiction: I Love It When You Do That Thing

  1. The loosy.goosy manner of speech really got to me. Sometimes I get so possessed with a need to be so articulate that I plum forget that real people speak in all sorts of colloquial /lopsided ways

    • Hi Perry
      I don’t know what SNL is – but I also preferred the librarian one. The problem was that I couldn’t get it to work in 100 words. Better not to write something, than to write something bad. Maybe my musical librarians will appear somewhere else some day!
      (BTW – in the end they decided to become mime artists :D )

  2. Hahaha! Too funny. Everyone’s a music critic …

    Good story, or, as we say in basketball when they make the basket without hitting the backboard, “swish!”

    • Thanks Kent. Personally, I think that barmaid should ask them to pop in every evening to clear the bar, then she’ll get to go home early every day! I love ‘swish’, by the way, you’ll have me talking like a septic in no time!

  3. I love ‘thingy’ as a word. I shouldn’t, but I unashamedly do! And you can always rely on a barmaid for a touch of … class thingy. :)

    • Thingy is one of my favourite words, along with whatjamacallit, doodah and dooberry. I should probably worry that there are so many words I can’t think of that I have several different words to replace them with. Early onset dementia maybe?

  4. Excellent story and I like the word ‘thingy’ too. I probably use it once a day at least! It is very descriptive! Wonderful story, thanks! Nan :)

  5. Very funny! I love how even the musician doesn’t quite know what his “mandolin-lute thingy” is (I referred to it as an “oversized banjo” :-)

  6. This was very clever and funny! Kudos to your hubby for steering you in a new direction! I especially like that Bernie calls his instrument a “mandolin-lute” thingy” :-)

    • Thanks Jan. Sometimes it’s hard to take a step back and look at your own stuff critically, so that’s when hubby comes in! Glad you liked my silly tale :)

  7. Dear EL,

    Hubsands can be so sensitive. No matter. There’s nothing more entertaining than mandolin-lute-thingy music. Love the spunky barmaid. Fun story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    • According to husband, it’s not true that librarians say ‘ssshhh’ all the time! He actually groaned when I told him my idea. But at least it gave me a chance to write about the highly critical barmaid :)

  8. Hilarious story as usual, El. XD I especially liked the last words of the barmaid.:) Well done. I’ll just add that SNL stands for Saturday Night Live, a TV comedy skit show that’s been running for years in the U.S. The cast changes from time to time but the show continues. Some of the skits have become classics.

    • Oh yes, I’ve heard of that show, thanks for clearing that up for me! And thanks for your lovely comments. Glad you enjoyed my silly tale :)

  9. Okay. Thank you for making me smile. Your story is simple but effectively funny. Even the original concept for this prompt sounds promising. I hope you’ll post that one too. I like your comedic stroke. Cheers!

  10. El, so funny! At least everyone is happy in the end. Ha ha. Your other idea seemed pretty funny, too. So glad you made it this week. This made me smile!

  11. I loved this and laughed out loud. Your description of the mandolin-lute-thingy was brilliant. I’m with Sandra on the use of thingy – as I get older I find it a good stand-in for lots of words and wonderfully, people seem to understand.
    Brilliant
    Dee

  12. Poor guys! Though, I’m sure I’d have the same effect on a crowd. I hope they’re not too discouraged, as this could be seen as a talent. This was a very engaging read, as always, but gosh I’m wishing I could read that librarian story!

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