Friday Fiction – Is Anybody There?

I’m working Friday this week and it’s supposed to snow heavily in the afternoon which means I could be snowed into work – a horrible prospect – so just in case I don’t make it back, here’s my slightly premature Friday Fictioneers offering. The first draft came out at a whopping 156 words so I’m quietly proud (in a British understated sort of way) that I managed to chop it down to 100 without losing the essence of the story.

For those who don’t know, this is a challenge to write a 100 word story from a picture prompt. It’s hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, and anyone can play. Thanks for hosting, Rochelle! Check out the link at the end of my story to see what other fictioneers did with this week’s prompt.

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Copyright-Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Copyright-Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Is Anybody There?

Uncle Harold was a cantankerous old git, so Auntie Agatha’s decision to contact him from the Other Side surprised us. Reluctantly, we positioned ourselves around the dining table holding hands.

‘A candle to light your way,’ Agatha said, placing the candlestick near Harold’s picture. ‘A telephone to aid communication.’

‘And the crayons?’ I asked.

‘If the line’s busy, he can write a message.’

The candlelight flickered. Heads bowed, we closed our eyes.

Silence.

Then a gasp. Our eyes flew open. Across the photo was scrawled, in Harold’s unmistakable hand:

“For God’s sake, woman, can’t you leave me in peace?”

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85 thoughts on “Friday Fiction – Is Anybody There?

  1. Dear El,
    I hope you don’t get snowed in. I know how that can be. now as for your story. This one left me smiling. Did I say smiling? Out and out laughter is more like it. You couldn’t have written a more perfect ending. Nice work.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

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    • HI Rochelle
      Didn’t get snowed in (phew!) but am sort of hoping for a bit of snow tomorrow as I fancy a woodland walk in the snow and I’m not back at work until Tuesday. I’m glad my story made you laugh 🙂

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  2. Creative and terrific take on this challenge. Well-written.

    We had our blizzard in Southern Illinois the week of Christmas, and I was snowed in for two whole days. The city trucks came down our roads, but I have a long driveway, and I couldn’t get my car out of my garage and to the cleared road. Hope things go better for you.

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    • Thanks for your lovely comments. I don’t think I’ll be snowed in any time soon after all – and I’m strangely disappointed, must be my inner child clamouring to get out and make snowmen!

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      • I wrote a poem about just that concept a little over a year ago. It related how frustrated and disgruntled I was at the forecast for snow, but then how everything changed once the snow started. When you have some time to visit the “Sandra Conner … By the Book” site, you can click on the “My Original Poetry” page and find it there.

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  3. This is the best I’ve read so far! Ingenious interpretation of the prompt. (We’re out in East Anglia so guess the clouds will be ‘snowed out’ by the time they get here.)

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    • Hi Sandra, thanks for your very generous comments. I’m close to East Anglia too but was still expecting a lot more snow than actually came – my fault for listening to BBC Weather!

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    • Thanks claireful – I didn’t intend to use all the objects originally – especially not those pesky crayons that looked so out of place, but then this idea just fell out of my fingers onto the keyboard – funny how that happens sometimes 🙂

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  4. Love the humour in this story, well done.
    We are snowed in today (South Wales) so it’s great to have extra time to spend on WP today
    Take care

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    • Thanks 40again. South Wales got a lot of snow, so I hear – I’m in the East and we’ve had very little so far so my little panic was all for nothing.

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  5. This is my favorite one this week! I loved it. Made me laugh out loud. The crayons gave me fits too, but I was determined to fit them in! I am so stubborn. haha! Kudos!

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    • thanks Tom – I can’t seem to comment on your blog – it adds funny characters to my website and then rejects the whole thing – will try harder next week – maybe I need to use a different address or something, but while we’re here I’d just like to say that I love your stories every week. Thanks for your excellent comment!

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    • Thanks boomiebol – the snow has been a bit rubbish so far, they keep predicting heavy snowfall and all we get is an icing sugar dusting- so it doesn’t look like I’m going to get snowed in after all.

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  6. Another great one, El! I love the ending. I also love that he could the crayons if the line is busy. I found that a little comical, although I’m not sure that was your intent. I loved it! – Amy

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    • HI Amy. Glad you liked my little story – the ‘busy line’ was supposed to be comical but with 100 words I had to change the sentence slightly so it lost a bit of it’s original punch – shame really but thems the breaks with FF!

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  7. i guess nothing changes from one world to the next…*laughing*
    always great to read stories like this one that lighten the day and send us back into life with a smile on our heart.

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    • Almost missed this comment – sorry! Thanks for commenting. I only follow people I really want to read more from – your gravatar isn’t linked to your blog at the moment so I can’t tell which Suzanne you are, but obviously one that interested me! – you probably ought to fix that so people can go from your comments to your blog in one click.

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