For those who don’t know, Friday Fictioneers is a challenge to write a 100 word story from a picture prompt. It’s hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, and anyone can play. Thanks for hosting, Rochelle! Check out the link at the end of my story to see what other fictioneers did with this week’s prompt.
The hardest thing about this week’s challenge was deciding whether to write “wasp nest”, “wasp’s nest” (as in The Girl Who Kicked The Hornet’s Nest) or “wasps’ nest” – it was an apostrophe catastrophe!
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In Which Tarquin Toffsworth Comes To A Sticky End
Tarquin Toffsworth evicted his first tenants aged twelve. He found a wasps’ nest, enticed the residents outside with jam, then terminated their tenancy with his shoe.
A single wasp survived. Her name was Jemima.
Years passed. Jemima was long gone but her legend lived on. Tarquin, now an unscrupulous property tycoon, leant nonchalantly over the balcony of his thirty-fifth floor penthouse. Jolene, Jemima’s great-great-great-great granddaughter, took vengeful aim. Tarquin yelped, clutched his buttock, over-balanced and fell to his death.
A passing treacle truck broke Tarquin’s fall. Jolene swooped, landed and licked.
‘So it’s true,’ she buzzed. ‘Revenge is indeed sweet.’
(100 words)
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Never heard of treacle? It’s a sweet sticky syrup!
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I do like a good name. Well done on coming up with old Tarquin!
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Thanks Paul. He started off as a Reginald (which is bad enough), but then Tarquin came to mind. I actually used to know someone called Tarquin, but he wasn’t an unscrupulous property developer, he was a hippy!
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Sweet! And absolutely perfect. I agree that Tarquin’s name is excellent as is falling in the treacle, something that always seems very Jeeves-and-Wooster-ish to me. As for the pesky apostrophe, “wasp’s” for one, “wasps’ ” for more than one (or even “wasps’s”). 🙂
janet
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Thanks Janet. I seem to write very English stuff on here – sometimes without realising it. For instance, I didn’t know they didn’t have treacle across the pond. How do they cope without it?
thanks for your lovely comment and the fabulous photo 🙂
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What the buzz! A treacle truck indeed. Had me looking that word up.
Tarquin was flat as a pancake and in my Aunt Jemima’s syrup (I had a very wasp-ish maternal side).
Great, creative, fun filled stinger of a tail. Congrats.
Randy
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HI Randy
I’ve added a note about the treacle – didn’t realise you don’t have it over there!
thanks for your sweet comment 🙂
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Delightful! A fitting end to nasty Tarquin!
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Thanks Carrie. Glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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I felt like I was wrapped in a tongue twister of sorts. What clever naming and story sculpting! Great!!
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Thanks Amy. I had a lot of fun with this one – although I started with 150 words and every one of them precious! It was a tearful time in the cutting room!
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Clever story, clever use of names – loved it!
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Thank you. I’m getting a bit carried away with my silly names lately 🙂
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Revenge indeed turned out to be sweet for this wasp ! a great story
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thanks Shreyank. Glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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The wasp family legend has lived on for so many generations. This was a unique take and really liked the story’s presentation.
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thank you. I liked the idea that the wasps were just biding their time, waiting for the perfect moment. Glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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Dear El,
Very clever! Loved it…what more can I say? Brilliant!
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle
I wasn’t sure I was going to pull it off this week. It’s probably a little too much story for 100 words, but it looks like I’ve succeeded. Yay!
I’m off to read yours now.
🙂
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Dear El,
You and your story are great. I love the way you built this story from the prompt. Great voice, narration, conclusion. Killer.
Aloha,
Doug
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Thanks Doug.
I think there’s a little too much story for 100 words here, but I’m glad it worked in the end. Cutting was painful – I started with over 150 words and wanted to keep them all! I’m looking forward to seeing what everyone else makes of this prompt 🙂
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Clever and fun! This was really enjoyable. Revenge is indeed sweet! And I like your phrase “apostrophe catastrophe” — good stuff here.
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Thanks zooky
Glad you enjoyed it. And you read my little intro too!
thanks for commenting 🙂
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Good one! I even liked the title!
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A Winnie-The-Pooh inspired title. I loved that book when I was little (with the E.H. Shepard illustrations not the Disney ones!)
Glad you enjoyed my silly tale!
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Yours is always so entertaining! What a witty story and full of meaning. I thoroughly enjoyed this E.L.!
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Thanks Joe. I had to make sure it was unique – here’s hoping no one else has written about a wasp called Jemima!
Glad you liked it 🙂
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Like something from Lemony Snicket. Grimly beautiful.
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Thanks Claire. I love ‘grimly beautiful’ – what a fabulous phrase!
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Lots of humour initiated from this week’s prompt. A great tale of revenge.
Denmother
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Thanks Denmother. I’m looking forward to reading everyone else’s stories today.
Glad you liked mine 🙂
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Great, great, great, great, great! The end justified the ‘means’.
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Hi Jules – I was going to add several more greats in for comedy value (as they’re hyphenated they only count as one word!), but I realised people would have forgotten the beginning of sentence by the time they got to the end so I managed to control myself.
Thanks for commenting 🙂
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I really liked this one. The last line says it all.
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Thanks EagleAye
Glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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Love all the “T”s
time for sweet revenge
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I realised too late that I should have called it Tarquin Toffsworth Terminated by a Treacle Truck!
Or maybe that’s too many T’s!
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You never, ever disappoint! 🙂 Superbly droll and matter of fact.
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Wow, thanks Sandra. I have to say – neither do you!
I didn’t think I was going to pull it off this week, I’ve crammed far too much story in there – you should have seen the length of the original version! Glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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Jolly good fun 🙂
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Indeed 🙂
Glad you liked it!
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Clever, humorous, enjoyable and well-written, all in 100 words! I especially like Tarquin’s full name. Well done. 🙂
I wondered about the apostrophe situation, too, and made the same decision as you. 😉
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Thanks Joanna – glad you enjoyed my story 🙂
As for those apostrophes – I think we both deserve badges of commendation from the Grammar Police!
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I think so, too! Do they come in chocolate?
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LOL. Brought a smile to my face. Who says planning isn’t the way to write, eh?
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Hi Trey
I made you smile. Yay! As for planning, it’s the only way when there’s only 100 words to play with.
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This was absolutely great. The name Tarquin definitely needs a revival, though I could not maintain my sympathies for him.
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Hi Anne
Glad you liked it. Not entirely sure about reviving Tarquin though – future Tarquins may not appreciate it!
thanks for commenting
🙂
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What a tasty treat this story was. Loved the names and treacle. It’s always nice to learn new words.
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Glad you enjoyed it! I had no idea that ‘you lot’ didn’t have treacle until someone commented on it. It’s a funny old world 😀
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Clever! I love this
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Thank you
🙂
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Loved it! I like a story that can make me laugh out loud. Sometimes these short and sweet (no pun intended) ones do the trick.
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I love hearing that my stories make people laugh out loud. Thank you!
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Very funny story for an apostrophe catastrophe, Tarquin!
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Thanks Perry, glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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Poor old Tarquin! He got his just desserts! (dreadful pun, sorry, ‘deserts’)
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Hi Trudy.
Between you and me, I was trying to work that pun into the story but couldn’t make it fit so I’m glad to see it in the comments 🙂
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haha sweet ending! love how crazy this story is, you never fail to surprise. ^^
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Thanks kz.
A sweet ending and a sweet comment!
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Well never leave any survivors… Revenge is sweet. I love it.
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Too true – it would have been a very different tale if Jemima hadn’t survived.
Glad you enjoyed it.
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What wonderful fun!!! Love the clever name you chose. In my book, you take “First Prize” this week for best “revenge” story. Thank you for visiting and reading my “Honeycomb.”
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Thanks Lora. Your story was great fun too.
thanks for your lovely comment 🙂
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This is hilarious! Great take on this week’s prompt.
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Thank you – glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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I can just imagine the legend of Tarquin being passed down from queen to queen, waiting for that perfect moment to strike. 🙂
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Thanks David. I’m glad you got that from the story – I had to cut so much I was worried it didn’t come across, but that was exactly the image I was trying to portray!
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No, it came through very well. It is hard though to fit everything relevant into a small box sometimes.
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🙂
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This was superb!
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thank you! 😀
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Hilarious. Thanks for another great laugh.
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Happy to oblige any time 😀
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What a neat take on the prompt-sounds like something I would think of-I like to study insects, spiders, reptiles, plants, whatever. I will follow your blog and invite you to follow my blog as well. best wishes, beebeesworld
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Thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed my silly tale. I’ll certainly pop over to your place 😀
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