Friday Fiction: The Ins & Outs of Love

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The Ins And Outs of Love

They lie on their backs in her garden, watching the storm clouds roll by. It was Kate’s idea, she saw it in a film and hopes Sam will think her quirky, cool and romantic. Sam thinks it’s weird, but stays because he’s hoping for some action.

Kate is in love; Sam is in lust.

He makes his move…

Kate is inexperienced; Sam is in luck.

Her clothes slide off and he slides on…

Kate is in the buff; Sam is in Kate.

Something’s happening deep inside her…

Kate is in trouble.

Sam is in a taxi, heading out of town.

 

(100 words)

 

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25 thoughts on “Friday Fiction: The Ins & Outs of Love

  1. HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!! Hilarious! The laughs started for me at Sam’s wanting some action. You took no prisoners this week.

    The style reminds me of the old rhyme, “Papa loved Mama, Mama loved men. Mama’s in the graveyard, Papa’s in the pen.”

    Bravo!

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    • Dammit! You’re absolutely right and I knew it before I posted it. It’s half of one thing and half of another but I liked both bits and couldn’t bear to kill either one. Well spotted 🙂

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    • Thanks Doug
      I agree with Helena too – I just really liked the intro. If I had more words I would have had a longer paragraph between each of the ‘in’ lines so the intro wouldn’t have seemed so out of place, but couldn’t make it work in a hundred words.

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  2. Enjoyed the rhythm of this one. I, too, loved the intro – as my editor says, maybe it would work better somewhere else. At least it’s not an entire chapter! Alicia

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  3. I like the intro, but agree with what Helena is say. All in all, it’s a cute little tale of lust and misplaced love. A true story that’s happened many times over the centuries.

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