This is my second Friday Fictioneers and it’s a tricky one – the photo almost had me stumped. I’m not even sure that my entry makes any sense but, as promised last week, I have stuck to exactly 100 words so at least it follows the rules even if it is a bit … odd.
For those who don’t know, this is a challenge to write a 100 word story from a picture prompt. It’s hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, and anyone can play. Thanks for hosting, Rochelle!
Here’s the picture:
See what I mean? It’s a tough one – I don’t even know what those poles with chains on are! Anyway, here’s my entry – let me know what you think. You can be brutal, I can handle it 🙂
Midlife Crisis
I’m washing up when Margy calls. It’s Derek’s turn, but I’ve not seen him since he started his new project. He’s been holed up in the den for days.
‘So you don’t know what he’s up to?’ Margy asks.
‘I did peek,’ I say. ‘When he popped out for glue.’
‘And?’
‘It looks like he’s making a giant ball.’
‘Really?’
‘At least it’s not women or fast cars.’
‘Fair point. Give me giant balls over women any day.’
I’m still laughing when Derek appears, all morose.
‘It fell on the floor,’ he says. ‘And now it’s all hairy.’
Poor Derek.
Yes, I got a good laugh out of this, especially, “Fair point. Give me giant balls over women any day.’”
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Thank you. I was going to end on that line originally but couldn’t find a way to turn it into a punchline – guess I’d make a poor stand up comedian.
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You and me both!!
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Me too, although it wasn’t seedily done. I love the last ‘poor Derek’, the sigh of resignation over his propensity to focus in on his little projects above all else is audible.
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Ha ha. Good one!! I had a hard time with this one, too! The chained bucket is for Disc Golf (Frisbee golf!), by the way. I know, because we have one of those at home. I wanted to incorporate it into my story but couldn’t find a way with the word limit. Oh, well.
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Thanks for explaining that. I was hoping someone was going to. It’s been driving me crazy trying to think what they could possibly be for,
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Hey, no problem. My husband plays disc golf. That’s how I know!
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Frisbee golf? Seriously? Is that what happens when you leave men alone in their garages – they invent frisbee golf? 😀
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Oh, you have no idea! It’s taken quite seriously. They have bags and special discs for each hole!
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I loved the end when the ball falls and gets hairy. hahaha! I didn’t know what that thingy was either! It was a rather difficult picture.
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Glad I made you laugh 🙂 Have you checked out Doug McIlroy’s post? (http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com) – he turned that ugly looking ball into something very beautiful.
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yes I did, got done reading it a few minutes ago. Truly something beautiful out of something ugly. Surprised also that his story and mine work pretty good together. ha! 🙂
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Good job. It was a difficult prompt, wasn’t it?
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Almost impossible! Loved your take on it 🙂
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i got a good laugh out of this, great work!! ^^
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Thanks! I was a bit nervous about posting it – I wasn’t sure if anyone else would find it funny so it’s a huge relief that so many did 😀
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Haha…Wait til he’s over 60, he will KNOW all about hairy balls. They will not only fall but sag. lol.
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If only the limit wasn’t 100 words – I could have squeezed in some sagging too!
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Haha enjoyed this
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thanks! loved your take on it too
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Dear El,
So glad you came back this week. Cute take…loved the giant balls line. As for disc golf, Mr. MacIlroy takes it very seriously.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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There’s a reason to tidy up a bit. Otherwise it all would be hairy balls… Great storytelling,
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This story was so funny. i about fell out of my chair laughing.
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Thanks Mari, glad you enjoyed it. I liked yours too – very clever 🙂
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no. no. not hairy balls. that’s just wrong. well done.
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Dear El,
Disc golf rules. Loved your hairy ball story. Quite a play on words and a great take on the prompt.
Thanks for you kind comment about my story.
Aloha,
Doug
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Thanks Doug. Loved your story – and your big shiny ball 🙂
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Aww, I like the voices of the women and I feel for poor Derek after all his hard work on the ball. I didn’t know about the disc golf thing till I read the comments either. welcome to the Fictioneers!
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Lovely comment, thank you. I really enjoyed this challenge – and we all got to learn a little about the crazy sport of disc golf too!
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